He stands naked against the backdrop of history, prepared to take what’s coming to him. The law is on his side. That alone gives him courage enough to admit his mistakes. The road ahead, rough terrain no doubt, looks better than what he left behind. Battles won and lost. Lives, deaths, innumerable seasons given to pride. Is there anything more damaging than pride, he wonders. His eyes are stinging, but no one knows. No one sees the invisible man who walks a million miles carrying the burden of a million crimes and whispers to himself, “Feet don’t fail me now.”
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24 thoughts on “Invisible Man”
And now I wanna dance!
The first sentence is so intense.. really pulled me in.
Good. I’m glad to hear it. Intense was what I was going for.
“Feet, don’t fail me now.” I’ve heard that expression before, but can’t remember exactly where. I’ve felt invisible and burdened a few times myself.
Yep, I’ve heard it too, but can’t place the saying. Maybe a comedy bit in an old movie. Seemed fitting for this story. There are probably many of us who have felt invisible and burdened from time to time. That’s all part of being human, isn’t it?
Well done, Honie. You’re so talented. Is today your birthday?! I know it’s coming. I can’t wait for the birthday posts!
Amy, you’re very kind. No, not my birthday. I hope I have another one coming though. Anniversary of blogging with WP. Party starts Monday.
Oh, oh, I misunderstood, Honie. Sorry.. I must have had it in my head that it was a birthday. Ah, the Anniversary, of course!! I look forward to it.
Well done. Very.
I think we’ve all felt invisible with the weight of the world on our shoulders. I’m intrigued by this.
That is exactly what I was trying to convey with this, Rochelle.
A powerful piece, well done.
Your words definitely evoke emotion, Honie. I read this several times, and there was a different thought for me each time. Very nice.
Thanks, Maddie. It does have several meanings. It did for me too.
Very stirring, Honie. There is a song, that is playing on the tip of my tongue, that this reminds me of… I’ll spend the next few hours trying to figure it out. 😉 Beautifully written!
Did you figure out the song yet? I thought if I gave you a few days it would come to you.That happens to me ALL the time.
I loved your closing, “Feet don’t fail me now”, brill piece 🙂
Yeah, I totally pilfered that line from somewhere. I don’t know where, an old movie or a book or a silly sitcom probably.
A very intriguing, philosophical piece, with nice gravitas in only 100 words. Your message not endorsing the Ads is a good idea. The Ads have just about pushed me to other blogging platforms.
Thanks. The WP terms of service state I am responsible for the content here. I don’t see how I can be responsible for ads I didn’t choose to include.
This reminds of a story by Margaret Atwood called the Sin Eater.
I’m not familiar with it. I’ll check it out.