Invisible Man

copyright - Adam Ickes

copyright – Adam Ickes

He stands naked against the backdrop of history, prepared to take what’s coming to him. The law is on his side. That alone gives him courage enough to admit his mistakes. The road ahead, rough terrain no doubt, looks better than what he left behind. Battles won and lost. Lives, deaths, innumerable seasons given to pride. Is there anything more damaging than pride, he wonders. His eyes are stinging, but no one knows. No one sees the invisible man who walks a million miles carrying the burden of a million crimes and whispers to himself, “Feet don’t fail me now.”

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24 Responses to Invisible Man

  1. The first sentence is so intense.. really pulled me in.

  2. rgayer55 says:

    “Feet, don’t fail me now.” I’ve heard that expression before, but can’t remember exactly where. I’ve felt invisible and burdened a few times myself.

    • Honie Briggs says:

      Yep, I’ve heard it too, but can’t place the saying. Maybe a comedy bit in an old movie. Seemed fitting for this story. There are probably many of us who have felt invisible and burdened from time to time. That’s all part of being human, isn’t it?

  3. Well done, Honie. You’re so talented. Is today your birthday?! I know it’s coming. I can’t wait for the birthday posts!

  4. Dear Honie,

    I think we’ve all felt invisible with the weight of the world on our shoulders. I’m intrigued by this.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  5. Sandra says:

    A powerful piece, well done.

  6. Your words definitely evoke emotion, Honie. I read this several times, and there was a different thought for me each time. Very nice.

  7. Very stirring, Honie. There is a song, that is playing on the tip of my tongue, that this reminds me of… I’ll spend the next few hours trying to figure it out. ;-) Beautifully written!

  8. helenmidgley says:

    I loved your closing, “Feet don’t fail me now”, brill piece :)

  9. Ye Pirate says:

    A very intriguing, philosophical piece, with nice gravitas in only 100 words. Your message not endorsing the Ads is a good idea. The Ads have just about pushed me to other blogging platforms.

  10. This reminds of a story by Margaret Atwood called the Sin Eater.

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